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내용 Eight years ago, I went to a Coldplay concert, it was one of the best experiences in my life. So I bought a ticket to see them again this year.

The style of the concert was almost the same as the last concert, but it was still amazing. When we entered the concert, the concert staffs gave us a special grass. When i wore the grass, the lights look like heart shapes. Watching a fire work through the grass was especially fantastic.

At the end of the concert, Roze from black pink suddenly show up as a special guest. She sang a song called 'apt' with Coldplay twice. It was very excited.
담당강사 Eliza1 등록일 2025-04-25
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Eight years ago, I went to a Coldplay concert, it was one of the best experiences in my life. So I bought a ticket to see them again this year.

The style of the concert was almost the same as the last concert, but it was still amazing. When we entered the concert, the concert staffs gave us a special grass. When i wore the grass, the lights look like heart shapes. Watching a fire work through the grass was especially fantastic.

At the end of the concert, Roze from black pink suddenly show up as a special guest. She sang a song called 'apt' with Coldplay twice. It was very excited.

 

 

Eight years ago, I went to a Coldplay concert; it was one of the best experiences in my life. So I bought a ticket to see them again this year.

The style of the concert was almost the same as the last concert, but it was still amazing. When we entered the concert, the concert staff gave us a special glass. When I wore the glasses, the lights looked like heart shapes. Watching a firework through the grass was especially fantastic.

At the end of the concert, Rose from Blackpink suddenly shows up as a special guest. She sang a song called 'Apt' with Coldplay twice. It was very excited.

 

Hello Ms. Moon,

Thank you for sharing your experienced about the concert of Coldplay. Your grammar is actually improving just be mindful of capitalized words and some grammar rules. 

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