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제목 | Hobby 2 | 등록일 | 2015-12-11 |
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내용 | When i was young. My friend taught me to handle the ball. At that time, Playing soccer was very interesting and easy. If we had only a ball, we could play a game anywhere such as a narrow road, small yard etc. and Soccer was easy to get along with other people. so i like play soccer and watch the soccer games such as k-league, worlde cup. I like a soccer player is Park jisung. He was a good player in menchester united team. but he is not a soccer player any more. He retired and will be a coach. I think he will be in charge of a national team coach for next world cup. |
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담당강사 | Chase | 등록일 | 2015-12-11 |
첨삭 내용 | When i was young. My friend taught me to handle the ball. At that time, Playing soccer was very interesting and easy. If we had only a ball, we could play a game anywhere such as a narrow road, small yard etc. and Soccer was easy to get along with other people. so i like play soccer and watch the soccer games such as k-league, worlde cup. I like a soccer player is Park jisung. He was a good player in menchester united team. but he is not a soccer player any more. He retired and will be a coach. I think he will be in charge of a national team coach for next world cup. ==================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================== When I was young, my friend taught me how to handle the ball. At that time, playing soccer was very interesting and easy. If we had a ball, we would play a game anywhere such as in a narrow road, small yard etc. Soccer was a good way to get along with other people, so I like playing soccer and watching soccer games such as k-league and world cup. I like a soccer player whose name is Park jisung. He was a good player in Manchester United team, but he is not a soccer player any more. He retired and will be a coach. I think he will be in charge of the national team for the next world cup.
1. You said: When i was young. My friend taught me to handle the ball. ->Please say: When I was young, my friend taught me how to handle a ball.
2. You said:At that time, Playing soccer was very interesting and easy. ->Please say:At that time, playing soccer was very interesting and easy.
3. You said:If we had only a ball, we could play a game anywhere such as a narrow road, small yard etc ->Please say: easy. Whenever had a ball, we would play a game anywhere such as in a narrow road, small yard etc.
4. You said: Soccer was easy to get along with other people. so i like play soccer and watch the soccer games such as k-league, worlde cup. ->Please say: Soccer was a good way to get along with other people, so I like playing soccer and watching soccer games such as k-league and world cup.
5. You said: I like a soccer player is Park jisung. ->Please say: I like a soccer player named Park Jisung.
6. You said:He was a good player in menchester united team. but he is not a soccer player any more. ->Please say:He was a good player in Manchester United team, but he is not a soccer player anymore.
7. You said: He retired and will be a coach. I think he will be in charge of a national team coach for next world cup. ->Please say:He retired and will be a coach. I think he will be in charge of the national team for the next world cup.
-Hello, again Mr. Antonio! Please study more about articles and prepositions. Also, be more mindful of proper punctuation. Have a good day! |