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제목 Hobby 1 등록일 2015-12-11
내용 My favorite hobby is playing soccer. and i spent about 8 hours last month.
Playing soccer is good for my health.
I became interested in my hooby through my friends. He has many hobbies such as soccer and baseball and so on.

When trying to new hbbies, i would find out about them through the internet.
It is easy to get useful information such as riviews, comments and needed equipments and so on.
so i would find out about new hobbies by on line.
담당강사 Chase 등록일 2015-12-11
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My favorite hobby is playing soccer. and i spent about 8 hours last month. Playing soccer is good for my health. I became interested in my hooby through my friends. He has many hobbies such as soccer and baseball and so on. When trying to new hbbies, i would find out about them through the internet. It is easy to get useful information such as riviews, comments and needed equipments and so on. so i would find out about new hobbies by on line.

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My favorite hobby is playing soccer and I spent about 8 hours playing last month. Playing soccer is good for my health. I became interested in my hobby through my friend. He has many hobbies such as soccer and baseball and so on. When trying to new hbbies, I would find out about them through the internet. It is easy to get useful information such as riviews, comments and needed equipments and so on, so I look for new hobbies online.

 

COMPARISON:

1.You said: My favorite hobby is playing soccer. and i spent about 8 hours last month.

->Please say: My favorite hobby is playing soccer and I spent about 8 hours playing last month.

 

2.You said:I became interested in my hooby through my friends. He..

->Please say: I became interested in my hobby through my friend. He..

 

3.You said: When trying to new hbbies, i would find out about them through the internet.

->Please say: When trying new hobbies, I would find out about them through the internet.

 

4.You said: It is easy to get useful information from riviews, comments and needed equipments and so on. so i would find out about new hobbies by on line.

->Please say: It is easy to get useful information such as riviews, comments and needed equipments and so on, so I look for new hobbies online.

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