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제목 The high fever and convulsions 등록일 2015-12-09
내용 Last Friday my daughter who is 22 months old had a high fever.
Her body temparature was avout 39 degrees celsius, she eventually fall into the fit of convulsions! I was so scared because it was my first time to see. At that time my heart was seemed to stop. I didn't know what I did. My husband called an ambulance and we go to the emergency room.
Although she took a fever reducer, there is no abatement in her fever. I had to wet the her body in tepid water to reduce the fever.
The convulsions might be appeared by a high fever which might be appeared by a cold virus.

I applyed for a leave and look after her. After 3 days, she got the normal temperature and she said "I..Love..You" I cried. It was the first time for her to say to me "I love you"

Now I know what I do when someone fall into the fit of convulsions. It is important to reduce the fever.
I thank God very much because we live everyday life healthily.
담당강사 Wynston1 등록일 2015-12-10
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Last Friday my daughter who is 22 months old had a high fever. Her body temparature was avout 39 degrees celsius, she eventually fall into the fit of convulsions! I was so scared because it was my first time to see. At that time my heart was seemed to stop. I didn't know what I did. My husband called an ambulance and we go to the emergency room. Although she took a fever reducer, there is no abatement in her fever. I had to wet the her body in tepid water to reduce the fever. The convulsions might be appeared by a high fever which might be appeared by a cold virus. I applyed for a leave and look after her. After 3 days, she got the normal temperature and she said "I..Love..You" I cried. It was the first time for her to say to me "I love you" Now I know what I do when someone fall into the fit of convulsions. It is important to reduce the fever. I thank God very much because we live everyday life healthily.

I'm glad your daughter is swiftly returning to good health Grace :)

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