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| 제목 | Plaese check the statment. | 등록일 | 2015-12-07 |
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| 내용 | When deciding which job I would take, the commute time is most important. Here are some reasons to support my opinion. First, I would like to work from nearby my house. In my case, I live in nearby Steel Making Plant. It takes about 20 minutes by my car. So, I can save the commute time and I don’t waste time. Secondly, I can save the gasoline and money for driving my car. Because my house is not far away from at work. That’ why I go along with this statement. |
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| 담당강사 | Chase | 등록일 | 2015-12-11 |
| 첨삭 내용 | YOUR COMPOSITION: When deciding which job I would take, the commute time is most important. Here are some reasons to support my opinion. First, I would like to work from nearby my house. In my case, I live in nearby Steel Making Plant. It takes about 20 minutes by my car. So, I can save the commute time and I don’t waste time. Secondly, I can save the gasoline and money for driving my car. Because my house is not far away from at work. That’ why I go along with this statement. ==================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================================== CORRECTED: When deciding which job to take, commuting time is most important. Here are some reasons to support my opinion. First, I would like to work nearby my house. In my case, I live in nearby the Steel Making Plant. It takes about 20 minutes by my car, so I can save and I don’t waste time commuting. Secondly, I can save gasoline and money when driving my car because my house is not far from work. That’s why I agree with this statement. COMPARISON: 1. You said: When deciding which job I would take, the commute time is most important. ->Please say: When deciding which job to take, commuting time is the most important.
2. You said: First, I would like to work from nearby my house. ->Please say: First, I would like to work nearby my house.
3. You said: In my case, I live in nearby Steel Making Plant. ->Please say: In my case, I live nearby the Steel Making Plant.
4. You said: It takes about 20 minutes by my car. So, I can save the commute time and I don’t waste time. ->Please say: It takes about 20 minutes by my car, so I can save and I don’t waste time commuting.
5. You said: Secondly, I can save gasoline and money for driving my car because my house is not far from work. ->Please say: Secondly, I can save gasoline and money for driving my car. Because my house is not far away from at work.
6. You said: That’ why I go along with this statement. ->Please say: That’s why I agree with this statement.
Hello, Mr. Antonio! Please try to see the corrected composition and the comparison to see the difference. I hope this helps. |
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